First Draft Summary : Where's my supersuit?

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As stated on the website, “Where’s my supersuit?” Zelik (2019) focuses on the understanding and
benefits of implementing exoskeletons around the world, which includes “to keep the workers safe and
reduce the fatigue of physically demanding jobs.” 

Based on the article, Zelik is interested to see how exoskeleton can be commonly used in public just like
smartphones instead of being in the research lab. It tells us that pioneer badge of exoskeleton approved
by the FDA have been used to assist on worker’s safety aspect and physical aspect. However, these
exoskeletons are very costly, not feasible and uncomfortable.

The article provided in depth information on how exoskeletons could help solve complex low back pain
issues, support ankle muscles, prevent neck fatigue, provide motorised assistance and also teach proper
lifting techniques. Zelik hopes that the exoskeleton will be commonly used for individual
and social benefits.

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  1. EngineeringJanuary 24, 2020 at 4:00 AM

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  2. EngineeringJanuary 24, 2020 at 4:01 AM

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  3. EngineeringJanuary 24, 2020 at 4:02 AM

    I have a few comments for improving your Summary,
    1) "just like smartphones instead of being" could be reduced to "portable".
    2)"not comfortable" can reduced to "uncomfortable"
    3)"Zelik hopes that the exoskeleton will be commonly used for individual and social benefits." is better than "zelik hopes in the coming 30 years, exoskeleton will be commonly used for individual and social benefits."

    I like your your overall writing,

    cheers,
    Saif

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    1. Firdaus RostamJanuary 29, 2020 at 8:26 PM

      Thank you Saif for the comment. I will make the necessary amendments.

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  4. Xuan JuJanuary 29, 2020 at 9:37 PM

    Hi Firdaus, I am Xuan Ju from the same Effective class tutorial group

    Just some comments from me

    1)what does "used in public just like
    smartphones instead of being in the research lab." mean?

    2) this summary didn't state briefly how the exoskeleton works

    Best Regards,
    Pay Xuan Ju

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  5. EngineeringFebruary 2, 2020 at 4:14 AM

    Hi Firdaus,

    I have one mistake for you to improve,
    1)The line" The article provided in depth information …" can be improved to " The article provided in- depth information …".
    Your overall writing is well-organised and well-written.

    Regards,
    Saif

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